The Concrete Bed

13 Jul

I hear a gasp
and smell the blood
a warm and liquid fume

My nostrils creamy
with the sense
my neurons suddenly bloom

Where am I now
I think to myself
realizing I´m on the ground

The concrete hard
against my face
that no longer seems so round

I notice tree tops
as if part of the sky

I fly above
and see myself
on the road about to die

A sense of wonder
spread throughout
my body feels so cold

A sudden shake
and lights are out
I let the end unfold

Short Story Slam 3

This is my entry for the Short Story Slam 3

Write Hard Award -  awarded by Bluebell Books

Write Hard Award - awarded by Bluebell Books

8 Responses to “The Concrete Bed”

  1. Jingle July 13, 2011 at 8:43 PM #

    very sincere write, love your talent, you rock.



    • Grå Sky July 17, 2011 at 8:50 PM #

      Thank you so much for your kind words Jingle 🙂 It was one of those poems that appeared almost by itself upon looking at the photo.


  2. mindlovemisery July 15, 2011 at 6:09 PM #

    Oh wow I love the intensity of your imagery


    • Grå Sky July 17, 2011 at 8:02 PM #

      Thanks so much mindlovemisery 🙂 Just read your Dichotomy -loved it!


  3. mish July 18, 2011 at 6:12 PM #

    I love your interpretation of the prompt – you have written it from a human perspective and in a very unusual and interesting manner – way to go !!


    • Grå Sky July 18, 2011 at 6:21 PM #

      Thanks so much Mish! I am really happy that you like it. I just read your entry on week 3 as well, and I love the dream story and the panicky feelings that you describe. Thanks 🙂


  4. Grå Sky July 18, 2011 at 6:22 PM #

    Thanks so much Bluebell books! 🙂



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