The Sea Inside

Long did I sail
under a blackening sky
a ship in stormy waters
on the gloomy sea inside

One night the wind raged
foamy nails speared the hull
I prepared for my fall
breathed my final mouthful

The ship about to break
thunder gave its final roar
light ignited the sea
and a vision there on board

On top the winds do rule
causing monstrous waves that drown
but deep where no light shines
there is stillness and calm ground

I threw an anchor of light
at the bottomless pit of blue
and followed it down where
I peace and wisdom could pursue

On my way down that night
I met creatures from the past
but seeing them up close
they no longer struck me so aghast

At the deepest depths I found
a tranquil space called Home
although water still here flow
no more wild currents roam

http://bluebellbooks.blogspot.com/2011/06/thursday-short-story-slam_21.html

This is my entry for the Short Story Slam Week 4

Week 5 Short Story Slam Writing Challenge Achievement Award - awarded by Bluebell Books

Week 5 Short Story Slam Writing Challenge Achievement Award - awarded by Bluebell Books

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12 Responses to “The Sea Inside”

frkpopo July 13, 2011 at 4:35 PM #

WOW!!!

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- graasky July 13, 2011 at 6:49 PM #
  
  Thanks Frk Popo. *hugs*
  
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Jingle July 13, 2011 at 8:41 PM #

wow, you write one for week 4, thoughtful.

love your enthusiasm, way to go.

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- Grå Sky July 17, 2011 at 8:05 PM #
  
  Thanks Jingle 🙂 I wrote the 5th and final one today so that i have been part of the entire 5 week slam. Its been fun!
  
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Jingle July 13, 2011 at 8:42 PM #

an adventure, well done, do read others to see how they do it and how different they take on the same prompt.

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- Grå Sky July 17, 2011 at 8:51 PM #
  
  🙂
  
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mindlovemisery July 15, 2011 at 6:04 PM #

Oh wow this imagery is so powerful, beautiful poem

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- Grå Sky July 17, 2011 at 8:04 PM #
  
  Thank you so much mindlovemisery. I do work on presenting my thoughts/ideas/emotions within analogies to better set an atmosphere. I am really glad to read that you enjoyed it!.
  
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mish July 18, 2011 at 6:03 PM #

I loved the rhythm and flow of your writing – well done !

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- Grå Sky July 18, 2011 at 6:24 PM #
  
  Many thanks Mish. I really appreciate it. I am actually quite fond of this poem myself, so it makes me very happy to know that you like it too.
  
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Grå Sky July 18, 2011 at 6:23 PM #

Thanks so much Bluebell books! 🙂

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