Like a hot air balloon
you rose, silently
Drifted away
along the lightest wind
I lay in rain and storm
anchored to the ground
Saw tough and taut
the connecting line
A message in a bottle
arrived from afar
The paper withered
it had your writing
I looked up in surprise
pulled the line in the sky
It dissolved into dust
and fell like snowflakes
I stand here still
staring into the void
In the cold shower of the past
amazing one.
apt, wise, and beautiful.
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Oh, thanks so much Jingle! I am stoked that you like it. I did a couple of mods on it to make the end better and more concise.
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In the cold shower of the past……for me all my imaginings kept running into those cold showers and I was left with reality each time.
Your poem is well written and beautiful. I agree with Jingle.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting Dan. I really appreciate it. I am glad that i have managed to share that experience, even though it is not all pleasant. I visited your blog too and love your writings!
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Vivid writing. Really captured the emotions in this poem.
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Thanks so much for your kind words Brownpapergilrl. I just read your entry on the Thursday Rally and its beautiful. Love your imagery.
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A beautiful piece of writing … great imagery … and the cold , harsh reality at the end !
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I really appreciate it Mish. Thanks so much!
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really well written. beautiful and concise
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I really appreciate it Oldstrong, thanks so much 🙂 Love you work too. It´s powerful!
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Beautiful, tremendous feeling and depth love it
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Awe, thanks so much mindlovemisery -I can only say the same about your latest Blind Spot. It hit recognition in my heart, and so did your observing perspective, and the underlying hurt and disappointment. *hugs*
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This positively rocks my socks. The imagery is magical. This evoked a strong memory of someone that drifted out of my life and never looked back.
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Thanks so much Joel! I have been away for long and just got back on the blog, 1.5 months of holiday and then back to a table loaded with work :)) Back now, so I will push in time for writing and for reading your latest work. Cheers again 🙂
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excellent.
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a story is told by heart,
which makes it remarkable.
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thanks so much Mary!
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Thanks so much Bluebell books! 🙂
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